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Post by irunwithvamps7 on Aug 26, 2010 23:40:12 GMT -5
This killed me:
'And sometimes you never open doors that are closed. Sometimes, what you have is enough. And it doesn't matter if you can never share coffee and pedicures. That you will never have a number for advice in your contacts, because that person would never answer the phone even if you did. There's no going back to certain places. Sometimes, there's no forgiveness or second chances.
Not all of it works out. Not all of it can be perfect.
But it's part of it.
Life.'
I have spent the last year trying to piece myself together after my entire adulthood of trying ton make myself believe that after everything that happened to me, I was "normal."
I'm still angry and still hurt, but I am learning to deal with it, at least I hope I am.
That part of this story just epitomized what the entire thing was about.
I can't thank you enough.
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Post by LadyNMujerN on Aug 27, 2010 0:29:59 GMT -5
Ohhhh lord, what a ride! This in my book has been by far my most favorite. Thank you for sharing and amazing story. It touched me at how unfairytale-like it was. Realism over hopeful false from other fics wins for my already weak heart. Haha. :-) It's the types you place too much daydreams over. This is a wholesome story where the unfairytale-like ends with a closure that becomes...magical. Seriously, the best life stories told are the real ones. The ones that couldve been you or any other, any day. I'd relate with feelings and emotions from moments and descriptions. This has been by far the most beautifully written story I've read in a while if not ever in this fandom. The kind of story I'd urge to share with others, even the others that aren't fans of the fandom. When it's that urge it's because it's that good. Thanks again for sharing and providing snuggle ups for reading time and enducing sighs of happiness from me for an hour or two before reality has to set in again. Please share more. From the looks of it, you're bound to have more. All my love and attention, LadyN Ps. How many green eyed and little sets of feet ran down those steps looking for Santa? just curious as to how big they expanded the fam. *sigh* there it goes again.
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Post by mspollito on Aug 27, 2010 0:50:16 GMT -5
awww is it really over? That was just beautiful. Now, I don't want to be greedy, cause this ending was just perfect, but if you ever feel compelled to give us an EPOV of the epilogue, by all means, feel free to do it. I think I would like to read what he has to say.
And congrats on finishing the story. I know it must be really hard to let go and decide when it is time to close a door. I've noticed a lot of authors having problems with this and sometimes the stories go on and on without not much going on in them. I must say, that I think that every single word on this story was worth it and had purpose. So again kudos.
Thanks for writing and hope to read more from you, in any form, SOON!
<3 Mariana (mspollito on twitter)
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Post by enamoredheart on Aug 27, 2010 4:08:35 GMT -5
Epilogue review: As always, this chapter was perfect. You have a way of breathing reality into your words, dani, because they come from the heart.
Your Bella and Edward live in a perfect place now, because they only act on truth, trust and love.
Bella's relationship with Alice will probably never be perfect but it's better. They aren't the best of friends but at least they can stand each other.
It was beautiful too see how Bree and Jacob have grown up together and even Edward defended the boy when he acted violently to protect Bree.
It felt good to see Bella so content with her chosen profession and endearing to witness Edward's insecurity about being able to have children with her.
I think the happiest moment of the epilogue for me was when Bella told him she was pregnant.
The end was perfect, even if some of Bella's relationships, like that with her mother, have remained broken. Not all can be perfect in life, but this is life and this is your story and I really love it and you, for writing and sharing such beauty with us.
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Post by TinyLitleDragon on Aug 27, 2010 4:21:55 GMT -5
Hi, I found this chapter little confusing... the writing I mean.. sometimes I didn't know who was speaking, to whom, or about whom.. Anyway, the last words of this chapter!!!!!! The part about standing on one foot etc.. and that sometimes we don't get second chances etc... that was THE BEST end i read so far... it was really beautiful, and far from that cheesy stuff people write.. it was just... epic.. If that was from your own mind - you should be proud at yourself! I am sure, i will write that down on a paper and stick it to my board, so I won't forget those words... lovely... The whole story was great to, i liked your writing (though it sometimes confused me..) , i liked the plot... It was great.. but the words at the end.. were just epic... Good luck with your next stories (ps: the name is my FFnet profile name, if you want to respond to this
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Post by Nano Annis on Aug 27, 2010 9:39:37 GMT -5
Thank you so much for a beautiful epilogue. It was a mish-mash of emotions and information, but I really enjoyed it. I cannot thank you enough for the hope your ending has given me.
I'm not the only one to mention this, but the last few lines of the chapter touched me deeply:
There's no going back to certain places. Sometimes, there's no forgiveness or second chances. Not all of it works out. Not all of it can be perfect. But it's part of it. Life.
At a time in my life when I am trying to find my place in the world and live in the now, this really resonated with me. I want to learn this lesson that Bella has come to terms with and reading your story has made me feel that it is just a bit more possible today.
Thank you. x
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Post by rebadams7 on Aug 27, 2010 23:01:06 GMT -5
Well, I just wanted to add my words of thanks for sharing this gem with us. I too found great peace in this passage:
There's no going back to certain places. Sometimes, there's no forgiveness or second chances. Not all of it works out. Not all of it can be perfect. But it's part of it. Life.
I know that to be true - and that makes the telling of the tale all the more valuable
Reb
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Post by ELB02 on Aug 28, 2010 9:23:02 GMT -5
Wow just happened upon this story yesterday when people were recommending it on... i cant remember what web site, so i had to check it out.
Just finished chapter 16 .... and it = INCREDIBLE!!
My favorite parts of stories are for some reason the most angsty and fighting scenes. The happy ones are good too, but my favs are when there is tons of tension!
I am going to read chapter 17 now.... cant wait to see what happens next!
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Post by keyecullen on Aug 28, 2010 15:49:06 GMT -5
Awww...I love that Jacob is so protective over Bree. I do think that Bella makes a good guidance councilor.
I am sure that Tanya didn't want a baby with Edward and she was probably on the Pill to make sure that she did not get pregnant. But I am so happy to hear that Bella and Edward are going to have their own little bambino!!!
It is nice to see that everyone is having their HEA.
I have so enjoyed reading this story.
Keye
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Post by Marilyn on Aug 29, 2010 4:33:37 GMT -5
I just finished the epilogue. Thankyou so much for this wonderful story. It truly was amazing
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Post by rhian0000 on Aug 29, 2010 6:19:11 GMT -5
Dear danieller123,
Firstly, I apoplogise that this is my first review, without the icon at the bottom of the chapters towards the beginning of the story I didn’t know how to review and am kicking techno-challenged self now that I see the apple saying reviews. Duh, right? And by the time I saw the review icon at the bottom of the page the chapters were just too involved for me to take a break to write something and I just had to click into the next one. I really owe you more that this, but here goes.
Well here it is, and I have to say that I have thoroughly enjoyed reading your story it has been such a journey, even if that journey was only a week for myself. I started reading it on Monday as a recommendation from my friend Babsiebaby and it consumed me and drew me in. That day I had free so read over 20 chapters, I was that enamoured then I fit in the rest while I was on holiday in Holland and here is my very long and heartfelt review now that I am home and I have finished your story.
There were so many heart-wrenching moments; at the beginning with Bella’s loveless and lonely existence, one action morphing into the next one, no rhyme or reason beyond money and alcohol – a robot just like she said. Writing this in the present time with short sentences really conveyed this. This, then that then this… I really felt the monotony of her life and the distinct absence of hope through her words, not necessarily in what she said, but more so in what she did not say.
I found the brief mention of shiny shoes very exciting, I had it in my mind that they belonged to Edward long before we knew they did and I knew that those shiny shoes and their grocery-buying owner would spell hope for Bella’s life. And that they did. I simply love your Edward, so caring and thoughtful, so selfless in many ways and struggling through his own grief and coming to terms with his own reality one that despite a loving family, good job and wealth was itself lacking in hope in many ways. He denied himself love because he felt that he had failed Tanya and harboured so much pain that she had failed him too.
Throughout their story, trials and tribulations I cried many a time – their moments together and glimpses of a broken and painful past were so harrowing and so real in the way that you wrote them. Bella’s inability to articulate her fears, even to herself sometimes, and the silences, reticence and looks that said everything was palpable.
I really didn’t want her to leave for school. Her love for Grace was so obvious to me and Edward saw it too, but he let her hide it. I wanted so much for them to discuss it then. Bella didn’t want to go, she should have said so. It could have saves so much grief and heartache if they could have been honest at that time. I understand the importance of her education, but my god my heart hurt when Bella spoke to Grace saying why she couldn’t stay and that she would if she could.
On the other hand I now totally appreciate that to be saved, Bella had to save herself. She had to go through the process of for the lack of a better phrase ‘bettering herself’ so that SHE could feel worthy of love, worthy of Edward’s time and of course a place in Grace’s life.
When she came back my heart was in my mouth, just showing up one day after almost a year of absence. I was angry with them both for allowing that much time to pass, but I get why they did. When they finally broke those walls and were honest with each other it was a revelation. Of course they still loved each other, I knew that but to see how they could now be together as a healthy loving partnerships was amazing, how happy they were at the end – so in love and a real family.
All I can really say now is thank you. Thank you so much for writing this tale and sharing it with us. Despite the tears and the pain and how much the emotions in this story effected my mood and altered my day, which is a testament to how good it was, that the feeling wouldn’t leave me when I stopped reading, I would not change a thing. Sorry for the long windedness of this review, but I had to tell you how much this story has meant to me and how much I have enjoyed it. You write extremely well, showing, not telling, giving glimpses and peeps at emotions and memories – spectacular.
I really liked the blog too, by the way, the banner is beautiful and the name ‘Under the Apple Tree’ and the way that it linked with the story throughout and had a meaning was lovely. And I loved the film at the end – it was so well done and told your story so well.
Not that you need my help, but I am spreading the word on twitter and getting as many people to read it as I can. They really shouldn’t be missing out on this.
THANK YOU Rhian xx
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Post by kpeery1 on Aug 29, 2010 16:37:17 GMT -5
Loved the outtake. Mr. Amzing-pants indeed.
I'm excited you are giving us little sneak peeks into their lives. Your style of writing is perfect for outtakes.
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Post by fanny on Aug 29, 2010 17:03:41 GMT -5
MR AMAZINGPANTS. HOW I HEART THAT MAN. loved it bb. even though you dared mark the amazingpants with snot and sneezy shit. perfect bb, just perfect. like mr amazingpants himself THANK YOU!
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Post by moninp on Aug 29, 2010 17:07:08 GMT -5
Loved Mr Amazing-Pants! just fucking perfection! Thank you Dani!
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Post by kellyprovence on Aug 29, 2010 20:52:31 GMT -5
that was the sweetest outtake EVER! They have come sooo far! I have goosebumps!
Thanks so much! Please, please keep the outtakes coming!! Such a big smile on my terrible, terrible day.
kellyprovence
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